Trifextra: Thirsty

Trifextra: Thirsty

August 11, 2012 Writing 40

A glass  on your front porch, filled with tea, quenched my thirst. Then, a vase converted, holding our love’s first rose. It shattered when you left, becoming the tool that slit my wrists.


For the weekend Trifextra challenge, we were instructed to choose 1 object, in 33 words (exactly) tell us a story with three different uses for one object.

Obviously, I chose a glass, with a sinister ending (No surprises there, eh?). What did you think? Feel free to share your thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!!


40 Responses

  1. Chelle says:

    Oh my! I was not expecting that ending. Great job of throwing in the unexpected.

  2. Lumdog says:

    Wow! Major u-turn on this. Well written poem.

  3. Tara R. says:

    What a diverse range of uses for your item. I didn’t expect that twist at the end either.

  4. Carrie says:

    Nicely done Sam.

    I just wonder if you should switch out “your love’s” with “our love’s”. I think that sounds better and works with how you have referred to the glass initially. Oh and I don’t think you need the comma after “A glass”. 🙂

  5. That was a great twist. A nice response

  6. Lance says:


    You know I love dark and gritty and emo. This was amazing. i didn’t think of it as a twist. I thought it just was gradual decline into nadmess. well done mama

  7. Sandra says:

    What a way to tell a story in 33 words! Sad–but great–entry.

  8. Donna Kiser says:

    This was super inspiring and helped me get to my #3 with the blood tinged water.

  9. Diane Turner says:

    OMG! Gulp! Creative use of the prompt and so visual and visceral. Great writing. Thanks for sharing.

  10. 2old2tap says:

    Well done! I really liked the progression.
    The ending was a twist well played.

  11. Marie says:

    You took me everywhere in this! Hope and despair especially. Wow.

  12. jannatwrites says:

    Nicely done. A rather sad ending, but real- sometimes that’s how life is.

  13. TheKirCorner says:

    Oh Steph…I love your writing, this was fantastic…and haunting..could see the red of the rose and the blood….it turns the colr of tea. Wow!!!!!! Such great images!!! Xo

  14. Wowza! I liked the declining feeling of this–great job with the prompt! Thanks for linking up.

  15. I didn’t expect the ending at all. With all of these, I start off thinking, Oh, yeah. And then use two comes up and I think, “OK that follows”. And with this one, use three zinged me totally. Completely surprised. Awesome.

  16. Djrelat7 says:

    Love it; You can see the start of the relationship blossom into love and great imagery to show the ending of the relationship…the ending is dark but I like it 🙂

  17. Oh, wow! I really loved this. Dark and sinister is always entertaining to read (and to write)!

    Nicely done. 🙂

  18. hypercryptical says:

    Oh darkly delicious!

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  19. TheKirCorner says:

    I’ve been writing about breaking up a lot too, the hurt, the slow slide from love into depression or hate etc…this was a perfect ease from one emotion to another.
    Great job as always.

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