December 11, 2012 Writing 8

Time was not something Elise had. She had cut her bucket list down, and found herself at the end of it. She sighed, long and powerful, before leaping from the bridge. For that one moment between time and space, she hoped that the bungee cord would break, ending her life on her terms, not cancer’s. It held firm bringing her a last delight in the twilight of her life.

This week’s offering was: Time.

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8 Responses

  1. Your last sentence is delightful! Lovely piece Sam!

  2. josie2shoes says:

    This was great! Sparsely worded with a great ending, turning the dark tone of death impending into the joyful experience of the momemt. For whatever reasons each of us possesses, all of us must live in the moment if we are to be able to say we truly lived!

  3. Eric Storch says:

    “She would cut her bucket list down” – I think “she had” works better.
    I think most people would like to end their lives on their own terms, which is why this short piece resonates so well. Nice job!

  4. Carrie says:

    I agree with Eric about your word choice in that one line. It’s the only place I was held up.

    Otherwise, short sweet and effective 🙂

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