The Thirst

The Thirst
July 27, 2012 26 Comments Writing Stephanie Ayers
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The drought has lasted 240 days now with no end in sight. Death is swiftly approaching. There’s only one barrel of water left. The going is slow but that barrel is nearing. I can see it clearly. I twist the handle and nothing happens. The spigot is dry.

Please, I beg of you, I would do anything for just one drop to wet my lips!

Who’s that standing in my way?

No! That’s my drop! You can’t have my drop!

Bang! Bang!

One final round of gunfire and you’re all mine.

I killed for you, now how about that drop?
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Leeroy turned to Angela for this week’s 100 Word Song. She chose #1 Crush by Garbage, and here is my response to it.

Today’s story was also inspired by Madison Woods #FridayFictioneers image prompt. The image we worked with this week is posted in the story above.

I always welcome and appreciate constructive criticism. Thank you for sharing your thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!!

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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  1. 26 Comments

    yaralwrites

    When it gets tough you get to see the true behavior of people. Nicely done.
    Here is mine yaralwrites.com

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      SAM

      Thanks, Yaral. I’ll be by soon.

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    Kwadwo

    A person’s sense of self-preservation can never be underestimated.

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      SAM

      no, and its scary to consider the lengths some may go.

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    Carrie

    is this a diary entry or the thoughts of someone? I like it, I can picture it happening but it’s a bit confusing what the POV is. It almost seems as if we start with one person and then after the Bang Bang there is another person’s thoughts…or maybe that is just me 🙂

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      SAM

      its the thoughts of one person all the way through. The lengths they will go through for their “crush” which, in this case, is water.

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    newpillowbook

    I found it a bit confusing too, but decided that was because the narrator is delirious from thirst. Then it occurred to me – we already know the water barrel is dry. Exactly WHAT is he expecting the person he shot to provide a drop of? Blood?

    (On second thought, after reading the story one more time, he’s talking to the water barrel at the end – it’s the barrel that’s all his, right? I still think he’s delirious, though. Good story.)

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      SAM

      Yes, you are correct on all accounts. He is delirious and he’s talking to the barrell, which, after shooting the “intruder” is all his again. Thanks for reading!!

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    Lora Mitchell

    I hope we are never that desperate that we have to shoot someone for the last drop. Your character made me so thirsty, I had to get up and get a drink of….iced tea. Nice work.

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      SAM

      Hahaha with the iced tea. And I agree with you. I hope we never get that desperate either.

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    rochellewisoff

    Deliriously insane. Nice piece of writing.
    Mine’s here: http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07/snarl.html

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      SAM

      Thanks Rochelle!

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    oldentimes

    Well done. A picture of how desparate things can be and how hard someone will fight to survive

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      SAM

      Yes, it is that. Thank you, as well!

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    sustainabilitea

    And the sad thing is that the last water would come out from the bullet hole if it were low enough, hastening the end. 🙁 Good job conveying the effects of delirium.

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      SAM

      Ohh..thats a nice twist. I didn’t even think of that.

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    Madison Woods

    I imagine there is some loss of control at the end like that, but I hope I’m never willing to kill for a last drop of water. Good story, it made me think deeper.

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      SAM

      I hope to never find out, as well. Thank you for stopping in and sharing your thoughts.

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    Shirley McCann

    Evil! And again, another drought story. I think we’re all feeling it. Great job.

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      SAM

      I think you’re right. I like the more creative takes with the wine or the alcohol. and Thanks!

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    Jan Morrill

    Oh, the desperation! I, too, am thirsty now. Sad, that every time I step outside and see how parched everything is, I feel thirsty for the earth. Hope it rains soon. Anyway, back to your story — I loved it!

    –Jan
    http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/fictioneers-flashfriday-gone-dry/

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    t

    Nice! Loved the last line especially.

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    Cameron

    I never would have put water and the addictive, obsessed creature in this song together. Wow! Bang bang, makes it almost childish, delusional? As if the whole thing some kind of deadly joke.

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      SAM

      delusional is right.

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