The Thirst

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The Thirst

July 27, 2012 Writing 26
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The drought has lasted 240 days now with no end in sight. Death is swiftly approaching. There’s only one barrel of water left. The going is slow but that barrel is nearing. I can see it clearly. I twist the handle and nothing happens. The spigot is dry.

Please, I beg of you, I would do anything for just one drop to wet my lips!

Who’s that standing in my way?

No! That’s my drop! You can’t have my drop!

Bang! Bang!

One final round of gunfire and you’re all mine.

I killed for you, now how about that drop?
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Leeroy turned to Angela for this week’s 100 Word Song. She chose #1 Crush by Garbage, and here is my response to it.

Today’s story was also inspired by Madison Woods #FridayFictioneers image prompt. The image we worked with this week is posted in the story above.

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26 Responses

  1. yaralwrites says:

    When it gets tough you get to see the true behavior of people. Nicely done.
    Here is mine yaralwrites.com

  2. Kwadwo says:

    A person’s sense of self-preservation can never be underestimated.

  3. Carrie says:

    is this a diary entry or the thoughts of someone? I like it, I can picture it happening but it’s a bit confusing what the POV is. It almost seems as if we start with one person and then after the Bang Bang there is another person’s thoughts…or maybe that is just me 🙂

    • SAM says:

      its the thoughts of one person all the way through. The lengths they will go through for their “crush” which, in this case, is water.

  4. I found it a bit confusing too, but decided that was because the narrator is delirious from thirst. Then it occurred to me – we already know the water barrel is dry. Exactly WHAT is he expecting the person he shot to provide a drop of? Blood?

    (On second thought, after reading the story one more time, he’s talking to the water barrel at the end – it’s the barrel that’s all his, right? I still think he’s delirious, though. Good story.)

    • SAM says:

      Yes, you are correct on all accounts. He is delirious and he’s talking to the barrell, which, after shooting the “intruder” is all his again. Thanks for reading!!

  5. I hope we are never that desperate that we have to shoot someone for the last drop. Your character made me so thirsty, I had to get up and get a drink of….iced tea. Nice work.

  6. rochellewisoff says:

    Deliriously insane. Nice piece of writing.
    Mine’s here: http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/07/snarl.html

  7. oldentimes says:

    Well done. A picture of how desparate things can be and how hard someone will fight to survive

  8. And the sad thing is that the last water would come out from the bullet hole if it were low enough, hastening the end. 🙁 Good job conveying the effects of delirium.

  9. I imagine there is some loss of control at the end like that, but I hope I’m never willing to kill for a last drop of water. Good story, it made me think deeper.

  10. Shirley McCann says:

    Evil! And again, another drought story. I think we’re all feeling it. Great job.

  11. Jan Morrill says:

    Oh, the desperation! I, too, am thirsty now. Sad, that every time I step outside and see how parched everything is, I feel thirsty for the earth. Hope it rains soon. Anyway, back to your story — I loved it!

    –Jan
    http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/07/27/fictioneers-flashfriday-gone-dry/

  12. t says:

    Nice! Loved the last line especially.

  13. Cameron says:

    I never would have put water and the addictive, obsessed creature in this song together. Wow! Bang bang, makes it almost childish, delusional? As if the whole thing some kind of deadly joke.

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