The Outer Limits

The Outer Limits

January 16, 2012 Writing 18

It was like a time bomb ticking its final countdown. The air was tense, stifled, as if all were holding their breath.

“All locked and loaded?” a voice cried from the left. Echoes of “yes” bounced down the corridor as thumbs lifted on either side in agreement. The soft patter of feet stepping away from the cars was heard only seconds before WHOOSH!

We’re off. Twisting. Twirling. Head jerking as we moved in mind numbing speeds surrounded by darkness up, down, under, over, around.

Screams filled the air as we tumble down towards the floor, only to suddenly twist up and be hurled towards the wall. I closed my eyes in sheer exhilaration, hoping against hope that I won’t drop my stomach contents into the open space in front of me.

Then, as suddenly as it started, it ended. I stood  up in the car, stepped to solid ground and felt my legs shake, reminders of the terror just endured.

My daughter looked at me, fear written in her soul and said, “Let’s do it again!!”


This is in response to the surprise (picture above) prompt posted today.



18 Responses

  1. Now THAT is one SERIOUS roller coaster. Ha! Fun take on the prompt.
    Came from the linky.

  2. Oh fun! I liked your take on the picture!

  3. NC Narrator says:

    Awesome take on the prompt! I went on a hideously scary roller coaster with my youngest son – I had to sit down until my legs would hold me again, and he’s standing there saying “Let’s do it AGAIN!”

    • SAM says:

      Actuallly the whole way in the long long line my daughter kept saying I dont wanna ride it! And I made her get on (because this is one of my top 5 coasters) and the whole way she was talking to everyone “Is it scary?” “Yes but you gotta ride it.” Haha. She was glad she did. It’s scary good fun.

  4. Lance says:

    fun one…I like the emotion

    good job

  5. I want to go again!!!!

  6. Cameron says:

    I love rollercoasters, and the giddy fear is just like that. Perfect.

  7. Carrie says:

    Yup, that sounds accurate! I love roller coasters

    • SAM says:

      I’m pretty good with any thrill rides, though I have to admit that there is that disconcerting thing about getting older that makes you more sensible too. *sigh*

  8. jesterqueen1 says:

    Whoosh!! Isn’t it funny how different a kid’s perspective can be from the parent’s? I remember when we took my son on his first rollercoaster this past spring, I was so worried. It was a fairly mild one, but it had reduced his sister to tears at an older age. He was adamant, though. So we went. About halfway through, when I had just re-braced my feet for the hundred-thousandth time to avoid squashing him, I asked “Are you OK” and realized he was grinning into the wind, completely exhilarated.

  9. Impulse to Write says:

    I love your take on this prompt. Very fun, lighthearted response. Lively. I was right there with you.

  10. Laura says:

    That was really cool!!!

  11. Angelia Sims says:

    Ah! My favorite! Sounds just like the New Texas Giant. Man, it was a blast.

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