The Martyr

The Martyr

October 11, 2012 Writing 24

The day hailed bright and sunny, the white walls soaking up the cheerful sunshine, as they always did.. The pristine walkway would be crowded today as two soldiers marched in front of me, and two followed behind. They would push me hard and fast, my arms trapped behind my back, encased in steel, and chained to my feet, also bound by steel. If I stumbled, their feet would fly into my ribs.

I will face my executioner at the end of the long white walk, though my only sin was to fight for my country. I am a prisoner of war and today, I will die.


The object of the #FridayFictioneers prompt is to use the picture prompt provided and write a 100 word response to it. Here’s my take.

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24 Responses

  1. The combination of sun and dark shade seem to foreshadow the darkness of your story taking place in a sunny place and the darkness in the narrator as he (or she) looks forward to what will happen.

  2. Carrie says:

    I like the juxtaposition of his situation: being in a beautiful sunny place but about to endure a dark horrific end.

    I think there could be a way to accomplish the contrast without him specifically going through internal dialogue. It’s mainly that first line with this part “there was nothing cheerful about today, or yesterday, or tomorrow, for that matter”. I don’t think all that is really necessary.

  3. Hi SAM,
    Nice contrast between the bright sunshine and white walls and the dark situation your MC is in. Ron

  4. rgayer55 says:

    Unfortunately, there will be no tomorrow. Nice story telling.

  5. For you a few lines you held me prisoner. Despairing dark against cheerful light. Well written.

  6. Sheila says:

    This definitely made me feel for this person and that’s hard to do in just a few words.

  7. billgncs says:

    good one … it has a resigned desperation about it. enjoyed your bio, alas I only have a checkered tablecloth.

  8. Do you think the prisoner would see the sunsine as cheerful? Interesting choice of words.

    • SAM says:

      Yes, as it always is. Perhaps that location was chosen for the easy deception. You wouldn’t expect a prison there.

  9. Nice story, I like the contrasts.

  10. Sandra says:

    Good one, nice projection of the inevitability of his situation.

  11. boomiebol says:

    This is so powerful, and the reality of some…like this

  12. K.D. McCrite says:

    This breaks my heart. The story, not the writing. Good job.

  13. Interesting contrast of a light setting and dark plot. I like it. Here’s mine:

  14. Lora says:

    Looking at it again, that alleyway could be a trap and lead to one-way prison. Nice work.

  15. Shirley McCann says:

    Amazing how many writers used the foreign/war setting for the pic. Must be a sign of the times. Sad, though. And scary.

  16. rich says:

    he has a toughness that i only wish i had.

  17. dmmacilroy says:

    Sear Sam,

    You captured the thoughts of the captured and shackled us to him for his long, hot walk. Well done.



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