The Martyr

The day hailed bright and sunny, the white walls soaking up the cheerful sunshine, as they always did.. The pristine walkway would be crowded today as two soldiers marched in front of me, and two followed behind. They would push me hard and fast, my arms trapped behind my back, encased in steel, and chained to my feet, also bound by steel. If I stumbled, their feet would fly into my ribs.

I will face my executioner at the end of the long white walk, though my only sin was to fight for my country. I am a prisoner of war and today, I will die.

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The object of the #FridayFictioneers prompt is to use the picture prompt provided and write a 100 word response to it. Here’s my take.

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Stephanie Ayers

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A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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24 thoughts on “The Martyr”

  1. sustainabilitea says:

    The combination of sun and dark shade seem to foreshadow the darkness of your story taking place in a sunny place and the darkness in the narrator as he (or she) looks forward to what will happen.

  2. Carrie says:

    I like the juxtaposition of his situation: being in a beautiful sunny place but about to endure a dark horrific end.

    I think there could be a way to accomplish the contrast without him specifically going through internal dialogue. It’s mainly that first line with this part “there was nothing cheerful about today, or yesterday, or tomorrow, for that matter”. I don’t think all that is really necessary.

    1. SAM says:

      Your advice was taken. I’m not sure the illusion of the cheerful walls is shown here though.

  3. bridgesareforburning says:

    Hi SAM,
    Nice contrast between the bright sunshine and white walls and the dark situation your MC is in. Ron

  4. rgayer55 says:

    Unfortunately, there will be no tomorrow. Nice story telling.

  5. rochellewisoff says:

    For you a few lines you held me prisoner. Despairing dark against cheerful light. Well written.

  6. Sheila says:

    This definitely made me feel for this person and that’s hard to do in just a few words.

    1. SAM says:

      Thank you for the very kind words. I hope to draw you in like this every time.

  7. billgncs says:

    good one … it has a resigned desperation about it. enjoyed your bio, alas I only have a checkered tablecloth.

    1. SAM says:

      Hahahaha! Be careful. I turned Madison’s FB watermelon picture into a 700+ word story. Your checkered tablecloth could be next, lol!

      1. billgncs says:

        🙂

  8. myothervoices says:

    Do you think the prisoner would see the sunsine as cheerful? Interesting choice of words.

    1. SAM says:

      Yes, as it always is. Perhaps that location was chosen for the easy deception. You wouldn’t expect a prison there.

  9. thecontradictoryoptimist says:

    Nice story, I like the contrasts.

  10. Sandra says:

    Good one, nice projection of the inevitability of his situation.

  11. boomiebol says:

    This is so powerful, and the reality of some…like this

  12. K.D. McCrite says:

    This breaks my heart. The story, not the writing. Good job.

  13. April Galloway (@AMelodyGalloway) says:

    Interesting contrast of a light setting and dark plot. I like it. Here’s mine: http://melodypearson.com/2012/10/into-the-desert-stronghold/

  14. Lora says:

    Looking at it again, that alleyway could be a trap and lead to one-way prison. Nice work.

  15. Shirley McCann says:

    Amazing how many writers used the foreign/war setting for the pic. Must be a sign of the times. Sad, though. And scary.

  16. rich says:

    he has a toughness that i only wish i had.

  17. dmmacilroy says:

    Sear Sam,

    You captured the thoughts of the captured and shackled us to him for his long, hot walk. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    1. SAM says:

      Thanks, Doug!

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