The Good Son

The Good Son
January 28, 2013 27 Comments Writing Stephanie Ayers

Her tears fell, single, soundless, on the stone beneath her knees, weeping for her son. “A few good men” flickered in her mind. He was good, one of the few. He enlisted early, at seventeen. “The proud, the few, the Marines.” He was all of that and more. He didn’t even graduate before they called his number. He stood astute, his arm raised, his hand positioned in perfect salute, dressed in his blues. A visit home before deployment and a return in a simple pine box, days before his eighteenth birthday. Her tears fell for a life snuffed too soon.

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Today’s flash fiction is brought to you by Lance/Leeroy’s 100 Word Song (David Bowie’s Soul Love) and Velvet Verbosity’s 100 Word Challenge (Soundless).

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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  1. 27 Comments

    2old2tap

    Well done. And so. Heartbreaking.

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      SAM

      And one I hope I never live through.

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    Carrie

    tragic…that a life should be ended so soon and sometimes for nothing

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      SAM

      This is partially true. My oldest stepson is planning to enlist when he turns 17 in March.

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    Kir Piccini

    oh Steph, this was heartbreaking. As the mom of sons, I wonder and worry where the world will take them.
    The imagery here was just so vivid.

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      SAM

      We share that worry. XOXO

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    scorpioscribes

    It never fails to awe me how you can put so much impact into so few words.

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      SAM

      Welcome back, mysterious stranger!

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        Scorpio Scribes

        Thank you!

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          SAM

          You’ve been missed!

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    Tara R.

    Living in a military town, I hate to say that this happens far too often.

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      SAM

      That’s so unfortunate.

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    deanabo

    My daughter was mentioning the air force the other day. This terrifies me.

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      SAM

      That was my stepson’s original plan til he discovered that to be a pilot you have to have perfect vision (I told him that, but what do I know?)

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        deanabo

        Well that count Tay out. Hmmm. I’ll tell her first thing in the morning.

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          SAM

          He decided on navy after waffling between that and marines. If she really must enlist, navy is the way to go.

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            deanabo

            I was kind of thinking that. The marines scare me more than the navy.. Don’t get me wrong, I respect all marines and I am grateful for each and everyone of them. But this is my baby girl.

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            SAM

            He says the navy has the best options for college which is how he made his decision.

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    Tessa

    So heartbreaking! Great story!

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    Imelda

    Oh, heartbreaking.

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      SAM

      Email me, please? I don’t have your email.

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    Velvet Verbosity (@velvetverbosity)

    Heart. breaking. How many generations of mothers have to lose their sons to war?

    Sorry you missed the link up deadline this week, but thanks for posting and playing!

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      SAM

      its my fault for not checking it. Thanks for stopping in anyway!

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    Diane Turner

    I watch on the PBS Newshour the young, young men and women killed in Iraq and Afghanistan, and my heart cracks at every photo delivered in silence. Our freedom is being protected by boys – brave, stalwart boys. Excellent writing. Thanks for sharing.

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      SAM

      Mine too, and then those Westboro Church people….grrr

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