The Boy Who Cried Wolf

The Boy Who Cried Wolf

February 19, 2012 Writing 16

Of lamb chops and mutton he ate his fill, his lips smacking in delight. He still couldn’t believe his luck. No farmers came chasing with pitchforks and guns. All because the boy lied.


For the weekend those devious minds behind Trifecta decided that for this Trifextra challenge, we were to stand on the shoulders of giants and rewrite a story in exactly 33 words.

I welcome and appreciate feedback. Even when I write something short like this, there’s always room for improvement. Please, feel free to share your thoughts.

Thanks for stopping by!


16 Responses

  1. Lance says:

    The last line makes the whole thing. Succint and surprising. I like it.

  2. Katie says:

    I love it! A refreshing retelling. I especially love the line “lips smacking in delight.” Delicious!

  3. barbara says:

    that big, bad wolf!!!! 🙂 delightfully retold – shiver

  4. megan says:

    Ha! I love it! I most definitely need to make sure my almost 10yo son never sees this version. 🙂

  5. Carrie says:

    Totally fits the devious nature of a wolf

  6. WritingChelleStyle says:

    I love it! I love it! I love it!
    I could picture him there, thoroughly satisfied with his craftiness and belly full.

  7. This is cute Sam 🙂

  8. Trifecta says:

    Thanks for joining up again, SAM. This was really well crafted, building up to a very clever last line. Great job! Join us for next our weekday challenge.

  9. Kir says:

    Brilliant!!!!! This was jusr perfect!

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