The Boy Who Cried Wolf

The Boy Who Cried Wolf
February 19, 2012 16 Comments Writing Stephanie Ayers

Of lamb chops and mutton he ate his fill, his lips smacking in delight. He still couldn’t believe his luck. No farmers came chasing with pitchforks and guns. All because the boy lied.

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For the weekend those devious minds behind Trifecta decided that for this Trifextra challenge, we were to stand on the shoulders of giants and rewrite a story in exactly 33 words.

I welcome and appreciate feedback. Even when I write something short like this, there’s always room for improvement. Please, feel free to share your thoughts.

Thanks for stopping by!

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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  1. 16 Comments

    Lance

    The last line makes the whole thing. Succint and surprising. I like it.

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      SAM

      HAHA. Thanks, Lance.

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    Katie

    I love it! A refreshing retelling. I especially love the line “lips smacking in delight.” Delicious!

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      SAM

      Thank you. the story is sinister enough on its own that it didnt need a new ending. 😉

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    barbara

    that big, bad wolf!!!! 🙂 delightfully retold – shiver

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      SAM

      Thank you, barbara!

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    megan

    Ha! I love it! I most definitely need to make sure my almost 10yo son never sees this version. 🙂

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    Carrie

    Totally fits the devious nature of a wolf

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      SAM

      They are devious creatures, aren’t they?

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    WritingChelleStyle

    I love it! I love it! I love it!
    I could picture him there, thoroughly satisfied with his craftiness and belly full.

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      SAM

      He is a smug and content little wolf. 😉

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    Shah Wharton (@shahw1)

    This is cute Sam 🙂

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    Trifecta

    Thanks for joining up again, SAM. This was really well crafted, building up to a very clever last line. Great job! Join us for next our weekday challenge.

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      SAM

      This one was really fun. Thanks for hosting it.

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    Kir

    Brilliant!!!!! This was jusr perfect!

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