Smooth Operator

Smooth Operator

October 17, 2013 Writing 26

I strut to the bar cool and bubbly. Feeling frothy and confident, I sit down next to a lovely lady  in a sheer dress with curves in all the right places.

“Why, hello there,” I say, putting on my best smile. “I’m Bud Wieser.”

“Hi,” she purrs, her eyelashes fluttering swiftly. “I’m Bacardi.”

I’m in love. “Wanna dance?” I ask.

Before she can answer, I disappear down the hatch in three quick breaths. My heart is crushed until I see Bacardi’s smooth body sliding down behind me.

“Let’s dance,” she says, swirling around me in a tight embrace.


So, the always amazing Troy convinced me to join in the Trifecta 99 celebration. We got to pick any word from the 99th page of the Oxford dictionary, and we could only use 99 words to tell the story. Here’s my 99.”

I’d love to hear your thoughts on my short short here. I always welcome and appreciate honest feedback. Feel free to share your thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!


26 Responses

  1. Nice. Can be a volatile pairing, those two. Interesting that we chose the same word.
    Great minds and all… 🙂

  2. Lance says:

    sext, strong, and I want 999 more words

    oh, and hi…

  3. Kir Piccini says:

    Well that was worth all the words, i love when you find the sexy,sensual place. I loved it of course, i love everything you write.

  4. Christine says:

    *hahaha* I love the point of view! I was sure she’d have a date already – a tall, dark, effervescent sort of guy… 🙂

  5. Diane Turner says:

    Loved this POV. I’m still grinning. Thanks for sharing.

  6. Ha! Giving a kinky new twist to the idea of cocktail hour! lol

  7. atrm61 says:

    What a terrific piece and though I don’t drink,I enjoyed the feel of this sexy dance thoroughly 🙂

  8. TNT says:

    yeah, I got a boner 😉 just kidding. Excellent play on words, and wonderful story. Want more.

  9. What a great anthropomorphic twist. Bottoms up! Thanks for being a part of our big 99th!

  10. Bud Weiser.. love that…

  11. Mike says:

    A great piece Sam. Loved ‘Bud Weiser’

  12. troy P. says:

    Hahaha! Perfectly twisted SAM! A love story that went straight for (or is that to?) the gut!

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