Show Vs Tell Character Description by Emma T. Gitani
We’ve all heard these expressions. Show don’t tell. Give meaningful description but don’t make a laundry list. The example below takes on showing character description without creating a laundry list.
Laundry List Example:
Matt started magic school two weeks ago, and he watched the girl who sat at his lunch table. She was skinny and had dyed-green hair, freckles, and gold eyes.
What do we really know about her now? What is your image? I’m reading this and think oh the wicked witch of the west’s daughter.
Matt started magic school two weeks ago, he still didn’t get what this girl at lunch was going for with her dyed-green hair. The frizzed-tangled mess sure grabbed your attention, just not in a good way.
He took a bite from his homemade sandwich and peeked at her, curious. Her new school-uniform hung off her skinny shoulders a size too big. Matt wondered if she was trying to hide something underneath and blushed. He rummaged in the lunch-bag for a drink and the stupid carrot sticks his mom put in spilled on to the table.
He snatched them back and looked around embarrassed. She didn’t acknowledge the mishap, and his eyes locked on the freckles that stood out against her pale cheeks.
Ahhh how sweet Matt is! And of course the new girl likes him too.
Hope this helps and leave your character descriptions in the comments. No laundry lists or dialogue, please. And Go!Give meaningful description but don't use a laundry list. #amwriting #writingadvice Click To Tweet