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December 8, 2011 20 Comments Writing Stephanie Ayers

Jenna felt weightless as her body flew through the air. She could feel nothing, smell nothing, say nothing; her whole body was paralyzed, except her eyes. Those, she could move. Quick, fluid rotations revealed an apartment of sorts, but the lack of lighting allowed for too many shadows. The creeping light made the creamy walls look dingy and the couch she landed on, a proud flower caught from the corner of her eye, looked out of place within it.

She knew that she was going to die, just didn’t know how or when. She’d forgotten when she’d chosen the pink ballet dress for the award ceremony that the Pink Killers were still at large. She’d forgotten when she used the flat iron to straighten her dark curls that she would match their victim profile to a T.

Her eyes widened in horror as a scalpel flashed before them. She watched, silently, as a thin red line stained the pink satin on her chest. A scream gurgled within her bowels as the vision of her heart pumping in latex hands filled her sight.

If only she hadn’t missed the bus.

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For the Indie Ink Writing Challenge, Kirsten Doyle challenged me with “tell a story about how missing a bus by a few seconds can change your life.” I challenged Niqui with “tell me I was dreaming.”

The picture used in the post above is the prompt for the I’m a Storyteller linkup hosted by Words in Sync. This one had a 200 word maximum.

I always welcome and appreciate concrit.

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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    Carrie

    Uhm, holy crap! So different from your earlier ideas. Freaky story, you got my heart pumping!

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      DM

      Yeah it did come out different. The storyteller picture started it, and the II prompt was easy enough to weave in. I might expand on this later since it leaves a lot of room for more. Thanks for brainstorming with me!!

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      DM

      And hahahahaa on your pun of “heart pumping”. 🙂

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    Angelia Sims

    Ack!! Super scary!

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      DM

      Is it really? Interesting. one of these days maybe I will scare myself, LOL.

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    lisa from insignificant at best

    Holy wow! This was insanely freaky! I felt so bad for the girl! What an awesome take on the prompt!

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      DM

      Thank you! Did you need more info, or was there enough here to satisfy?

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        lisa from insignificant at best

        Oh there was definitely enough. You gave enough info to explain what happned without filling in all the details…basically letting us do that on our own. It left me with chills, to be honest.

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          DM

          Thank you for the affirmation.

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    runningforautism

    WOW! There’s an interpretation of the prompt that I wasn’t expecting 🙂 Disturbing but riveting story, very well written!

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      DM

      Thank you for the challenge. It was an awesome one that had so many ideas running through my head. This is the only one that would work, but I’m okay with that. I like surprising people. 😉

      Thank you for the compliment on my writing as well.

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    debseeman

    I don’t just *LIKE* this I LOVE it! Wow! Creepy, scary, spine tingling. Excellent piece!

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    Sherree Worrell

    Um…wow! Awesome use of the prompt (and the picture). Totally wasn’t expecting that. Bravo.

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    brandontheduncan

    Good lord! You scare me with these prompt responses sometimes. Missing a bus became that huh. Wow!

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      DM

      It’s just how it goes sometimes. I’m always trying to think outside the box.

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    bridgetstraub

    Okaaay, that was a little dark! I have no words.

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    caroline gerardo

    I love dark, O.K. I’m not your average girl. That pink is the title and I associate it with cotton candy ballet shoes colors really snapped me hard. For a short post you ripped some great emotions all packed in. Great work

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