Loyal

Loyal
September 23, 2011 36 Comments Writing Stephanie Ayers

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Tall, dark, and sinister are the words I’ve heard describing me, though I have a heart of gold.

I have a full time job that leaves me little time for family or friends. In fact, I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands.

I enjoy subtle evenings in the shadows, intelligent conversation, and playing with robots.

I am slightly deaf from the roar of the train that flies past my home, and have mild scarring from the burn of the hot steam that powers my life.

I’m a nice enough fellow if you take the time to get to know me, fiercely loyal, naturally overprotective, and always willing to fight for my beliefs. I am not easily swayed or easily broken.

My voice may be wooden, but my heart is real, my blood is red, and my land is dry. I’ve been here for a lifetime, and an eternity still to go.

Seeking mutual souls with which to share all I have to offer. Applicants must love trains, guns, and be prepared to entertain. Time manipulators need not apply.

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  This week’s prompt from Write on Edge was to write a personal ad, looking for love. I went with a different character, from a lesser known WIP. Can you  figure out who it is? I’ll reveal at the end, with a link to this character’s part of the story.

Did you guess it was the Time Keeper?

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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  1. 36 Comments

    Karen Peterson

    “Tall, dark and sinister.”

    Great way to start out!

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    Erin

    ” I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands.”

    My favorite line of it all! Leaves so much open!

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      DM

      I didn’t even realize, but you are right!

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    Sweaty

    “I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands” Oooh… steamy! lol

    “My voice may be wooden, but my heart is real, my blood is red, and my land is dry” Why for some reason I have Clint Eastwood in my mind when reading this? Hahaha.

    Definitely a rough-on-the-edges kind of guy you got there! 😉

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      DM

      Actually I was thinking of the Daniel guy that plays in the Cowboys and Aliens movie when I was creating him, with a mixture of other factors involved.

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    Jackie

    I love it…. so many possibilities with this person! I see the making of something you could continue!

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      DM

      I do hope to get back to the story, and I hope that he will appear more within it.

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    TheKirCorner

    He sounds so mysterious and achingly complex. I can’t wait to see who he is, and take the “ride” with him. Brilliant job!

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      DM

      Thanks, Kir. I always appreciate that you come around. Your support really means the world to me.

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    Galit Breen

    Hmm- I love the mysteriousness of this man and -ahem- can’t wait for your big reveal!

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      DM

      Yeah, it was at the very bottom. He is the Time Keeper from the steampunk series I started. he is rather mysterious. It was fun to peel off some of his layers.

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    Tina

    I can honestly say that I knew who you were talking about! Yay me! But what kind of first date would happen if you dated the Time Keeper? That would be the story!

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      DM

      YAY!! You know, that would be interesting. Maybe I will go off on the side and explore the possibility sometime.

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    Katie

    Wow. A very mysterious and compelling character you’ve got yourself here! I was so intrigued I had to click your link to see his origination. The genre of his story is brilliant. Definitely makes me want to read more!

    I loved this line, as it really began for me the mystery of this character:

    “In fact, I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands.”

    Great job!

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      DM

      Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed the story. I really need to get back to it.

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    Anastasia

    I loved it. I like that you start feeding us clues right away, but they get more obvious as we keep reading.

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      DM

      Thank you. I’m glad the clues weren’t overly subtle.

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    angela

    I like the little clues sprinkled throughout, using bits and pieces to hint at something more than meets the eye!

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      DM

      Yes!! You absolutely got it!

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    juliemoore

    I can’t decide if I’d want to fall for the Time Traveller or not. I don’t like long distance realtionships. Unless he could take me with him…. He sounds like an awesome guy though.

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      DM

      The Time Keeper stays where he is, he doesn’t jump through time like the other guy does. Perhaps you were thinking of the other character from that same story?

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    Lance

    Like the small clues and the sarcasm or use of words that someone other than time keeper would call sarcasm.

    Good job, Dm.

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      DM

      I think he might have a sarcastic side as well. Thanks for noticing and appreciating it.

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    CDG

    I love that you went for the challenging character – the less obvious choice. The description in this is great, and I imagine I’m sensitive to it after the memoir prompt earlier in the week. The line about enjoying subtle evenings in the shadows is killer. Love it.

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      DM

      I had 3 ads written up–this one, one for Louis, and one for Regina (which gave away a little secret), but this one won. It was more fun to work on a character that doesn’t have a lot of development than to feed off of one that is more well known. This was a great challenge and fun too!

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    Jen Has A Pen

    I never write fiction. I’m scared of it. When I started this, I assumed this was someone from your life – not a character. You obviously know your characters so well, as your writing is extremely connected.

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      DM

      I wouldn’t say I know them so well. They often surprise me, but thank you for the compliment!

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    Rox (@roxisbrilliant)

    So I actually don’t know the story (I’m thinking I should go check it out!), but this was a great post. Very evocative.

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      DM

      Thank you! I’m glad you checked it out too. Will I see some Steampunk from you soon too?

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    Carrie

    I never guessed it was the Timekeeper…I’d forgotten about that story (it’s been mostly Weathered lately 🙂

    Great job. He sounds even more intriguing.

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      DM

      Yeah, it’s gone on the backburner for now. Blair and Co just screams at me…LOL.

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    Cheryl @ Mommypants

    I absolutely knew it was time keeper. I love how you humanized him while at the same time, made it clear he’s not human. Well done!

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      DM

      Yay!! I’m glad you remembered him. I’m also glad that someone caught on to the fact that he is not 100% human.

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    Karen @ Time Crafted

    I like that there are small details checkering the ad that lead you to the destination of ‘something more’. You chose a fascinating perspective to write the ad from! :>

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