Loyal

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Loyal

September 23, 2011 Writing 36

SM ISO SF

Tall, dark, and sinister are the words I’ve heard describing me, though I have a heart of gold.

I have a full time job that leaves me little time for family or friends. In fact, I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands.

I enjoy subtle evenings in the shadows, intelligent conversation, and playing with robots.

I am slightly deaf from the roar of the train that flies past my home, and have mild scarring from the burn of the hot steam that powers my life.

I’m a nice enough fellow if you take the time to get to know me, fiercely loyal, naturally overprotective, and always willing to fight for my beliefs. I am not easily swayed or easily broken.

My voice may be wooden, but my heart is real, my blood is red, and my land is dry. I’ve been here for a lifetime, and an eternity still to go.

Seeking mutual souls with which to share all I have to offer. Applicants must love trains, guns, and be prepared to entertain. Time manipulators need not apply.

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  This week’s prompt from Write on Edge was to write a personal ad, looking for love. I went with a different character, from a lesser known WIP. Can you  figure out who it is? I’ll reveal at the end, with a link to this character’s part of the story.

Did you guess it was the Time Keeper?

 

36 Responses

  1. “Tall, dark and sinister.”

    Great way to start out!

  2. Erin says:

    ” I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands.”

    My favorite line of it all! Leaves so much open!

  3. Sweaty says:

    “I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands” Oooh… steamy! lol

    “My voice may be wooden, but my heart is real, my blood is red, and my land is dry” Why for some reason I have Clint Eastwood in my mind when reading this? Hahaha.

    Definitely a rough-on-the-edges kind of guy you got there! 😉

    • DM says:

      Actually I was thinking of the Daniel guy that plays in the Cowboys and Aliens movie when I was creating him, with a mixture of other factors involved.

  4. Jackie says:

    I love it…. so many possibilities with this person! I see the making of something you could continue!

  5. TheKirCorner says:

    He sounds so mysterious and achingly complex. I can’t wait to see who he is, and take the “ride” with him. Brilliant job!

  6. Galit Breen says:

    Hmm- I love the mysteriousness of this man and -ahem- can’t wait for your big reveal!

    • DM says:

      Yeah, it was at the very bottom. He is the Time Keeper from the steampunk series I started. he is rather mysterious. It was fun to peel off some of his layers.

  7. Tina says:

    I can honestly say that I knew who you were talking about! Yay me! But what kind of first date would happen if you dated the Time Keeper? That would be the story!

  8. Katie says:

    Wow. A very mysterious and compelling character you’ve got yourself here! I was so intrigued I had to click your link to see his origination. The genre of his story is brilliant. Definitely makes me want to read more!

    I loved this line, as it really began for me the mystery of this character:

    “In fact, I have very little downtime at all, yet plenty of time on my hands.”

    Great job!

  9. Anastasia says:

    I loved it. I like that you start feeding us clues right away, but they get more obvious as we keep reading.

  10. angela says:

    I like the little clues sprinkled throughout, using bits and pieces to hint at something more than meets the eye!

  11. juliemoore says:

    I can’t decide if I’d want to fall for the Time Traveller or not. I don’t like long distance realtionships. Unless he could take me with him…. He sounds like an awesome guy though.

    • DM says:

      The Time Keeper stays where he is, he doesn’t jump through time like the other guy does. Perhaps you were thinking of the other character from that same story?

  12. Lance says:

    Like the small clues and the sarcasm or use of words that someone other than time keeper would call sarcasm.

    Good job, Dm.

  13. CDG says:

    I love that you went for the challenging character – the less obvious choice. The description in this is great, and I imagine I’m sensitive to it after the memoir prompt earlier in the week. The line about enjoying subtle evenings in the shadows is killer. Love it.

    • DM says:

      I had 3 ads written up–this one, one for Louis, and one for Regina (which gave away a little secret), but this one won. It was more fun to work on a character that doesn’t have a lot of development than to feed off of one that is more well known. This was a great challenge and fun too!

  14. I never write fiction. I’m scared of it. When I started this, I assumed this was someone from your life – not a character. You obviously know your characters so well, as your writing is extremely connected.

  15. So I actually don’t know the story (I’m thinking I should go check it out!), but this was a great post. Very evocative.

  16. Carrie says:

    I never guessed it was the Timekeeper…I’d forgotten about that story (it’s been mostly Weathered lately 🙂

    Great job. He sounds even more intriguing.

  17. I absolutely knew it was time keeper. I love how you humanized him while at the same time, made it clear he’s not human. Well done!

  18. I like that there are small details checkering the ad that lead you to the destination of ‘something more’. You chose a fascinating perspective to write the ad from! :>

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