Left Behind

Left Behind

October 18, 2013 Writing 54

As the dirt hit the coffin, Janice flicked away the tear that stubbornly sneaked down her face. Her fingers gripped and released the prescription bottle in her pocket.

“See you soon, lover,” she whispered.


It’s a Trifextra weekend,with requirements to write a 33-word explanation of what scares you (or your character).

Feel free to share your honest thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!


54 Responses

  1. Scary in more ways than one! Well done, SAM

  2. joetwo says:

    That is so sad. Very powerful.

  3. Kir Piccini says:

    Oh SAM, wow. I could feel that bottle between my fingers.
    Hoping she wasn’t his demise in the first place 😉

    you drew such an incredible story with just 33 words, but then again you always do that.

  4. Lance says:

    damn, scary, emotional, and dramatic. I loved it. so dark.

  5. Grace Black says:

    Well done! Deliciously dark.

  6. howanxious says:

    Whoop… dark and mysterious. Liked it.

  7. Quickstepp says:

    I agree, this could be read two ways. And both of them are scarey!

  8. jannatwrites says:

    This feels like a Romeo and Juliet situation. She fears being alone and plans to join him. Sad.

  9. lumdog says:

    Tragic, but it seems so real. Well written.

  10. Hmm I know that feeling.
    Always scary for those left behind.

  11. Diane Turner says:

    Looks like she’ll be joining him very soon. Excellent piece. Thanks for sharing.

  12. Ouch, not a good move Janice. Good response to the challenge.

  13. Draug419 says:

    So sad…

  14. Tina says:

    Facing life without the one you love? Very scary!

  15. Glynis says:

    I could feel that bottle in my hand, wonderfully rendered!

  16. Beautifully written! and so sad!

  17. The position of being afraid to be alone is certainly a common one. I loved the way you conveyed it. Thanks for linking up. Don’t forget to vote.

  18. So very sad…

    • SAM says:

      It is but I can’t help but love those stories about old couples dying within days of each other. I just have to put my own spin on things, LOL.

  19. A fear .. and a solution.. well written

  20. Powerful piece and nicely done!

  21. That is so sad, but well written.

  22. Bastet says:

    very sad, and yes pretty scary…you wrote that very well!

  23. plumbum says:

    This fear, too, I recognise. Hope it never happens to me, but if it does not, then it happens to him – and would I wish that? No. I do not believe that I could have expressed this with eloquence in 33 words. Well done.

  24. troy P. says:

    Now THAT truly was scary – on all sorts of levels. Great job, dear!

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