In Time: Transformation

In Time: Transformation

February 18, 2012 Writing 9

Thursday you met Viola Grace. This continues the Time Keeper’s Story.

“At first, I thought perhaps it was heaven, but I knew better. I knew my fate. There’s no way I could have survived the fall from the train. I stood here, in this same spot, felt the pain, knew I was no longer whole. I’d been invaded with foreign parts and devices.” The Time Keeper flexed his arm, began  rubbing his shoulder in memory. He sighed softly. A small drop of water formed in one eye. “They may have taken my heart, but they can’t take my memories. Viola Grace, my greatest nemesis, will always be my one true love.”


This week’s song was Hotel Illness by The Black Crowes. This is my story in exactly 100 words (as it should be).

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9 Responses

  1. Lance says:

    GREAT last line. Really strong emotional connection to this. I like the Timekeeper so much.

    great work

  2. Carrie says:

    Unrequited love with someone bound to destroy you! Or has destroyed you? Is he destroyed or has his role as the Timekeeper given him new lease on life…such as it is?

  3. eden baylee says:

    I’d been invaded with foreign parts and devices. << stellar line that's incredibly visual,

  4. Cameron says:

    Oooh, Steampunky stuff, love and destiny, and a nemesis. nicely done. And the line about being invaded with foreign parts? I like that a lot.

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