In Time: Swing Life Away

In Time: Swing Life Away

August 8, 2012 Writing 15

This follows immediately after this: A Moment in Time

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“You loved me once. You could let me go.” Viola pleaded, her steel facade melting as she spoke.

“I no longer have a heart. I have the scars to prove it,” the Time Keeper said, holding his pistol firm.

She hissed, “You think I don’t?  I have to live forever remembering what I did to you.”

“I would’ve moved the earth for you! Now I’m stuck here, less of a man, heartless, between worlds, forever.”

Viola stepped closer and kissed his lips. A single shot was fired and she slumped to the ground.

“It doesn’t have to be like this.”


This week’s 100 W0rd Song was Swing Life Away by Rise Against (my stepson’s favorite band). This is my interpretation of it.

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15 Responses

  1. k~ says:

    Treacherous beginning to what feels like it could be a much larger story. You have my attention!

  2. Eric Storch says:

    Ok, first, the 100 words? Love it! The TimeKeeper and Viola both saying, “It doesn’t have to be like this.” I love even more. (See? I went and read the other parts)

  3. Carrie says:

    I’m not sure who said the last line…I assume Cage but…it doesn’t quite fit coming from him, assuming he just shot her.

  4. Tara R. says:

    So much going on here and I am hooked. Tight dialog and swirling emotions, doesn’t get much better.

  5. dberonilla says:

    You painted a very vivid picture with just 100 words! Wow!
    I am also intrigued and would like to read more. 🙂

  6. There’s a Pink Floyd song “Why don’t you talk to me” (or something like that) with a similar lyric to that last line. I imagine them repeating this scene over and over in a horrible time loop.

  7. t says:

    Damn. That second to-last line punched me.

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