In Time: Remorse

In Time: Remorse

March 1, 2012 Writing 11

Viola knelt in the middle of a cemetery. The gray tombstone felt cold under hands. A single tear filled her eye and spilled down her cheek. She ignored it. She breathed deeply, letting air fill her chest and empty in a trembling exhale. Her nostrils flared and her head bowed. Her eyes fixed on the name carved into the stone before closing. Her head lifted to the sky as more tears cascaded down her face. Her broken heart thumped painfully in her chest.

“I’m so sorry, Cage!” Viola cried, her torment revealed in her whisper. “Oh, how I miss you.”


It’s time for another 100 Word Song. This week, jester queen got to choose the song. It was hauntingly beautiful Bonnie Raitt version of Dimming of the Day. In exactly 100 words, this is what I was inspired to write.

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I welcome and appreciate your feedback. Please feel free to share your thoughts on this short piece in the comments.

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Wikipedia: face definition: the front part of the head that in humans extends from the forehead to the chin and includes the mouth, nose, cheeks, and eyes. →


11 Responses

  1. Carrie says:

    interesting…so Viola regrets her drastic actions…yes, trying to kill someone could be a bad idea if you actually love them 🙂

  2. Kir says:

    I loved how it broought me to feel remorse with her, her anguish was so well written.

  3. debseeman says:

    I can feel Viola’s pain. Love the way you’ve written it.

  4. Love Viola and the world you built around her.

  5. Lance says:

    You know how much I like this story. This 100 really showed viola’s states of of grace. This was a favorite of mine for the week.

    great job

  6. jesterqueen says:

    That last line “oh how I miss you”. You would never guess how she came to be there from this portrait of her. Well done!

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