In Time: Escape

In Time: Escape

August 8, 2012 Writing 15

This picks up after this: Viola Grace (yay!! Moving on!!)

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The train stopped and Viola stepped off, careful to keep her eyes averted from the carnage around her. The air pirates had done more damage than she’d anticipated, and the bullets she’d taken in were weakening her. She’d barely had the strength to push Cage from the train. She looked down at the owl bracelet and tore it from her wrist. Regret weakened her further and she made a silent vow to seek revenge on whoever had made her do this. She wanted to run far from this place, but the pirates were watching. Whoever paid them would know she ran. She had to follow through. It was her only hope of avenging Cage.

A tanned, weathered hand stretched out to her. She looked up, taking in the man’s appearance. He wore a coat of filth over his skin, a yellowed shirt, brown breeches, and a red bandana on his head. A gold circlet hung from one ear, and gap-toothed smile rested on his lips.

“M’lady, your chariot awaits,” he said. He bowed in mock curtsy as his other hand swirled behind him with exaggeration, pointing to the airship behind him. “Your flight has arrived.”

Words of protest flowed from her mouth against her will and they seized her roughly, forcing her into the ship. To the onlookers surveying the damage, it looked as if they kidnapped her. The desired illusion was complete.

Perhaps now, Viola would be free.


Our Trifecta Writing Challenge this week was to use the 3rd definition of the word “flight”: a. a trip made by or in an airplane or spacecraft   b : a scheduled airplane trip  in 33 to 333 words. Viola had to escape somehow, and I really wanted some pirates in my story. It fit, so I went with it.

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15 Responses

  1. Lumdog says:

    Wow. I was pulled in by this story. I hope this is part of a larger piece.

  2. Carrie says:

    Well, I’m happy to see that Viola wasn’t actually trying to murder poor Cage.

    Yay, pirates! 🙂

    • SAM says:

      I’ve left some hints along the way on how she is being “controlled” but it may not be obvious until you can actually sit down and read from the beginning (if I ever finish the story!).

      Yes I like the pirate angle. There’s a lot you can do with an airship.

  3. Jeanna says:


  4. Tara R. says:

    Airships and pirates! A swashbuckling adventure at it’s best.

  5. Wisper says:

    Ooo. I want to read the rest of that story. Airpirates and trains and such? Sounds like the makings of a grand adventure!

  6. trifectawriting says:

    Ah, the faked kidnapping! But you’ve managed to include (coin?) the term “air pirate.” And that’s pretty awesome. Great job with the prompt. I hope Viola enjoys her freedom.

  7. Annabelle says:

    Intringuing! Looking forward to seeing what happens next.

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