In Time: Destiny Awaits

In Time: Destiny Awaits

September 2, 2012 Writing 2

This short piece follows Part 2. In case you’ve forgotten, you can read the introduction of the four girls and their names here.

“I’m going. Anyone coming with me?” Blubber said, turning to her three friends. They stepped to the edge of the gaping hole in the playground and looked down. The swirling mass within resembled the black hole they’d studied in science class recently. They glanced at each other, fear mimicked on each face. Six eyes turned to her as their hands clasped together.

“What if we don’t come back?” Kristin whispered.

“At least we will be together,” Nitwit answered.

“On three?” Tweak asked.  Three heads bobbled agreement. “One…two…three! Party time!”

A blue flash exploded from the ground as the girls vanished.


This week’s 100 W0rd Song of inspiration is Warren Zevron’s Monkey Wash, Donkey Rinse! I had a story with a hole in it, so I went with that.

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2 Responses

  1. Carrie says:

    I’d never read those 2 previous pieces. Nice to see where the girls came from and how they end up with the Timekeeper.

    No issues with this piece. Short, sweet, and you get the girls into the portal so it serves its purpose 🙂

    • SAM says:

      Yay! Although going back and reading through part 2 , I see some thngs that could be fixed. I’m glad it’s really making sense for you now.

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