In Time: A Sailing She Goes

In Time: A Sailing She Goes

August 30, 2012 Writing 10

This picks up immediately after The Escape.

Too quickly, Viola found that her kidnapping was far from an illusion as the air pirates tied her securely to the bow of their ship. They bound the ropes so tightly around her body, the only thing she could move was her head. At least she knew they didn’t intend to kill her or else they would have left her dangling, not caring if she plunged to the earth far below as they sailed the sky. She had no idea where they were going, but she knew that it wasn’t a place she wanted to be. He’d tricked her again.


This week, Velvet Verbosity challenged us to take you on a road trip in just 100 words. I took my character on a road trip through the sky.

What’d you think? Please share your thoughts and constructive criticism in a comment.

Thanks for stopping by!!


10 Responses

  1. deanabo says:

    I love it that you leave me wanting more. Great writing.

  2. Carrie says:

    is “he” Father Lee? He just keeps pissing her off 🙂

  3. Tara R. says:

    This makes me think of her as a living figurehead on the pirates’ ship. Great descriptions.

  4. arcticwren says:

    Wow, what strong images! Nicely done.

  5. This is fun, and as others have said, “descriptive”. For some reason I feel compelled to push you on those descriptions. Stretch yourself, and really “show” (instead of tell). 100 words isn’t much to do this, but whatever next week’s challenge is, maybe really focus on just the description part. I only say this because I sense that you’ve got more in you, and I want to see it. 🙂

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