January 25, 2012 Writing 18

He sat at the table. The courthouse was quiet as the jury entered. As the last few filled their seats, he began to laugh. All turned to look at him, their eyes wide in horror. He knew he should stop, but he couldn’t. The joke wouldn’t leave his mind alone.

“Mr. Hamilton, do I need to send your client to the chambers?” the judge asked before turning to the jury. “Have you reached a verdict?”

More laughter filled the courtroom.

“We have, your honor. We find the defendant guilty of this beast of a crime, murder in the first degree.”


For the Indie Ink Writing Challenge this week, trencher challenged me with “A character can’t get a joke or some gut bustingly funny image out of their head. But they’re at a funeral, or working at a suicide hotline, or some other place where it would be bad form to break down into gales of laughter. What now?” and I challenged Amanda Lynn with “A magic wand, a set of wings, and a little fairy dust is all I needed to get through this so-called life. This line must be the first or last sentence of your story. It should be no fewer than 300 but no more than 600 words.”

Lance at My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog has a brand new challenge out. He offered us the song “Take Me to the Pilot” by Elton John and we have 100 words to write what we are inspired by it. This was mine. Where’s yours?

And finally:

The Trifecta Writing Challenge. As always, a one word prompt is offered, using it’s third definition, and you write using no less than 33, no more than 333 words. This week’s word was  beast noun ˈbēst

I always welcome constructive criticism. The more you give feedback, the more I grow. Feel free to leave me feedback in the comments.



18 Responses

  1. Lance says:

    so much well written stuff going on…

    I like how you used beat and chambers…well done

  2. Love the idea of this, but 100 words is just too few! I want to know more! LOL

  3. tashtoo says:

    Nailed it…but this 100 word thing is a tease…certainly puts an end to the question “how do I end”

  4. jesterqueen1 says:

    My son DOES THAT. The more trouble he’s in, the more he laughs, and it’s not “I’m so scared I’m giggling” laughter. It’s “Oh this is the best joke I’ve ever HEARD” laughter.

  5. barbara says:

    oh, gallows humor – graveside or funeral laughter – so inappropriate and yet so very hard to stop once it has slipped its bonds. Well done. 🙂

  6. Carrie says:

    Ooohhh…a button for the new 100 words. Awesome!!

    I love the piece, it’s well written. And I can see the man sitting there laughing. It’s very Hannibal Lector-ish.

  7. Cosmos Cami says:

    And then it was all over…

    Excellent writing!

  8. karen says:

    That’s a solid story. I really appreciate that the person laughing is the one person who really should show more self control. That really brings it to life.

  9. Tara R. says:

    You meshed all the prompts together nicely. I’ve never been in a court room and lost my composure, but I did laugh at my grandmother’s funeral.

  10. Marian says:

    multi-prompt, indeed. i like 100 words. i can see you do, too.

  11. trifecta says:

    Multi-tasking! Nicely crafted response to this week’s Trifecta challenge. I’ve been the person laughing at a funeral. Once it starts, you’re done. You’ve added a super creepy element to it, though. And I like it. Hope to see you back on Friday for our weekend challenge.

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