Four-letter Words

Four-letter Words
January 29, 2013 112 Comments Writing Stephanie Ayers

Photo courtesy of Cheri Lucas.

She said she loved the train. In the next breath, she said she loved me. Odd that we were on the wrong side of the train to catch it. If she really loved the train, she would have made sure we were on the right side, but we weren’t.

Look. I’m getting repetitious already.

She had that effect on me. Momma always said to be careful with the four-letter words. Use them to make an impact she would say. Corrine used four-letter words a lot.

I don’t think she always meant them.

Momma would say she was bad but I couldn’t help having feelings for her. She was pretty, though some might say she was a bit on the plain side. Besides her bad habit of using four-letter words, she was nice enough. She liked helping other people. She’d helped that old couple by the train get across the tracks.

She said she loved the train.

Why didn’t she stay on the right side to catch it? Why were we standing here on the slippery cobblestone embracing? Didn’t she realize her weight pulled me forward, making balance quite the task?

Love.

She loved the train. She loved me. Which is true, which is false? Are neither true? Could both be false? Momma always said to be careful with four-letter words. Use them to make an impact, she would say. Corrine used four-letter words a lot.

I don’t think she always meant them.

Momma says people who waste four-letter words are bad. Not worth the ground they walk on, she would say. The ground was so slick.

Letting go was the easy part.

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For the Scriptic prompt exchange this week, Michael gave me this prompt: “People say they love a lot of things, but they really don’t. It’s just a word that’s been overused.” -Bob Dylan

I gave Katri this prompt: headache, shoes, season, an hour, and a garden.

I am also linking this up to wordpress’s weekly writing prompt. This week we were given the picture above as our inspiration.

As always I welcome honest feedback. Please feel free to share your thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!

 

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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  1. 112 Comments

    Diane Turner

    You did a fabulous job of depicting his angst about her feelings. I could feel his questions, his uncertainty. Excellent writing.

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    Brett Myers

    It has been a while. You are getting good. Very good. πŸ˜€ What you put out and what you held back made it fun and interesting to think about. Very nice, SAM…

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      SAM

      It’s nice to see you here again, Brett. Thank you for the compliment on my growth as a writer.

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    stankmeaner

    I liked that I couldn’t quite figure if he physically or emotionally let her go…

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    Eric Storch

    I “love” your alternate take on the meaning of “4-letter words.” Well done.

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    lexy3587

    I liked the repetition… and the preoccupation with “Momma”, though maybe mid-makeout isn’t the time for that kind of thought πŸ˜›

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      SAM

      LOL. They were embracing. πŸ˜‰

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    Carrie

    He doesn’t quite sound like the kind of guy I’d picture traveling to little known European hamlets πŸ˜‰ A bit of a homebody, a momma’s boy of sorts. Simple

    Perhaps she sees him as a project.

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      SAM

      Perhaps. Who said they were traveling?

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        Carrie

        good point πŸ™‚

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    Karen

    Very nice. I read a lot of the prompt responses and this was refreshing (and diabolical). Really, really good.

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      SAM

      Thank you! Welcome to my Write side. I’m so happy to meet you.

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    Stacey (@Staceysmoments)

    It was very intriguing to me trying to figure out what his feelings were. He seemed very conflicted. Great job!

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    servilia1

    I really enjoyed this, there was a sense of mystery behind it, and interpretation. Art. http://socalmistress.wordpress.com/

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      SAM

      Art? Now there’s a compliment! Thanks!

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    ottomandandy

    Very romantik .

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    Beyond Back Creek

    I want more! This is a great opening for a novel. I feel like something creepy will happen next.

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      SAM

      Never thought of writing more. Maybe someday. Thank you for commenting.

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    kareemssalam

    really love this, im kind of new to wordpress and kind of stumbled on this by accident but im glad i did

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      SAM

      I’m glad you did, too. Thanks for reading.

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    Feit Can Write

    I enjoyed the spin you put on this. My version focused on somebody in the background dealing with a different set of issues: http://feitcanwrite.com/2013/01/29/one-thousand-words-a-dp-challenge/

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    Melissa Barlow (@mcbarlow36)

    Congrats! I’m a little freaked out now…great post!

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    neenslewy

    Liked this – a ‘flash’ of inspiration!

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    buffalostarmedicine

    ouuuuu, like the twist there at the end…

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    cambriascorner

    Phenomenal idea and writing! Great post, I very much enjoyed reading it!

    cambriacorner.wordpress.com

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    andy1076

    Love it! It’s no wonder you are on fresh pressed twice πŸ™‚

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        andy1076

        oh nvm sorry it’s showing dpchallenge three times and one of them is yours πŸ™‚ my bad!

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          SAM

          It’s all good. Glad you stopped in!

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            andy1076

            My pleasure! enjoyed your post πŸ™‚

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    thechancepassenger

    Great read. Simple but amazing!

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    Ritu KT

    Great writing. I ‘love’ the train too and I ‘love’ your story. I ‘mean’ it. I guess I use four letter words a lot too πŸ™‚
    Congratulations on being Freshly Pressed.

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      SAM

      Thank you and I “love” your comment. Four letter words are fun to say. πŸ˜‰

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    thefabjessgoing

    What a fascinating little story! Your use of repetition was really effective. I really enjoyed it. πŸ™‚

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      SAM

      Thanks! Your comment means a lot to me.

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    segmation

    Momma says people who waste four-letter words are bad. Not worth the ground they walk on, she would say. The ground was so slick. Momma isn’t always right, right?

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      SAM

      Oh I don’t think momma is right at all.

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    ETrade Supply

    My mom always said what I should or should not do, well I will say yes to her minds, but doing on the “no” side. Finally, my mother had no idea on me! Should I feel lucky to get rid of mom’s protection or not?

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      SAM

      depends on what it is she told you to do or not to do.

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    mihirkamat

    This is a beautiful piece, made me want to jump right in! Thank you for posting – and congrats on being freshly pressed!

    – Mihir
    http://mihirkamat.wordpress.com/

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      SAM

      Thank you, seriously.

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    Let's Get The Beat!

    I love it how you use the term “four letter words” instead of ‘love’. Less then three the storyline as well. Congrats for being freshly pressed ^^

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    sociopathicuttlefish

    Fantastic little piece of writing. Really quite something; you’re very talented. πŸ™‚

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      SAM

      Thank you. It means a lot to me that you took the time to leave a comment.

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        sociopathicuttlefish

        Your very welcome πŸ™‚

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    gipsika

    YOW! Sinister!

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    cheerupitsraining

    Awesome monologue. I would like to see it performed on stage! Well done.

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      SAM

      Oh that’s intriguing.

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    Scribbler

    Wonderfully written!

    Adieu, scribbler

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    Neetika

    Fabulous piece of work πŸ™‚ The opening lines just drew me in.

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    beverlyq

    You write as a man so effortlessly!

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      SAM

      Oh wow! Thank you!! That’s such a nice compliment.

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    aimeekj

    I love this type of writing, it is really beautiful. Very well done (:

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      SAM

      Thank you. I appreciate your comment and the compliment. πŸ™‚

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    MoMabie

    Honesty and vulnerability. Two of my favorties. Bravo.

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    The Epistolarian

    Love the play btw the 4 letter words concepts. Also love the male perspective. The only aspect that seemed contrived was the “Why isn’t she on the right side to catch the train?”… it doesn’t lay naturally with the rest of the situation. I mean that as constructive criticism, not standing judgement. I LOVE the prompts… I’ll need to look into Scriptic and the weekly writing prompt (even if it’s just for my own personal writing log and not a post or anything). Thanks!

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      SAM

      Thank you for the honest feedback. I hope to see you at the Scriptic challenge!

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    ohtallulah

    How wonderful to hear such a convincing male perspective. I haven’t dared attempt this but you do it so well! Great work πŸ™‚

    Tallulah
    http://choosesimplicitydotorg.wordpress.com/

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      SAM

      Thanks! Perhaps I was a man in a former life. πŸ˜‰

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    albeindc

    Poignant little piece here, and I liked the use of repetition (hardly see that anymore). Definitely could be used in a shortfilm.

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      SAM

      Thank you so much. Hmmm. Your handle suggests you are in DC. Is that true?

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        albeindc

        I am in the DC area yes

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          SAM

          Cool. I’m a little south of you in Virginia.

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    Ayodeji Lancaster

    Beautiful I must say. An excellent piece.

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    kaenna23

    Reblogged this on Living the Life I Imagined and commented:
    i “love” it!

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      SAM

      Thank for liking it enough to reblog it. I’ma bit touchy about reblogging (not a fan). I love that you think my work is worth sharing, I’d just prefer to be asked next time, please? Thanks.:) Thanks for stopping in and taking time to leave me a comment.

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    honestlymodest

    I “love” it! You are very talented. Congrats on being freshly pressed!

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      SAM

      “love” the word play. Thanks for the compliment and for stopping in.

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    kcald

    This post is really beautiful. You wrote almost poetically and utilized repetition, which I loved. Your mom seems like a wise woman, we all need to be careful with our “four letter words”.

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      SAM

      Thank you for your generous compliments. I took care of the extra comments, so no worries.

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    elkemurphy

    Thank you for this well written story. I like that you describe the awkwardness of getting off balance while embracing – I have never heard anyone talk about this before.

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      SAM

      Thank you for your comment. I appreciate what you said.

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    tua1992

    I don’t know where you heard that from but honestly my mother actually always told me to be careful with the “four-letter words”- love or hate. And today when I look at all the young people who just started going out together, using the words “love you” over frequently, the words seem to lose their meaning and significance. I would really like to reblog this and also share it on twitter. Can I, if it’s ok with you?

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      SAM

      Love/hate weren’t included in the list of 4 letter words we weren’t allowed to say growing up, but they are, in fact, 4 letter words, and they are both overused.. I would love if you tweeted the link to my story, and since you were kind enough to ask about rebloggiing, I’m okay with that too. Thank you for enjoying my story so much you want to share it.

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        tua1992

        Yes, I missed the other four-letter words we are not allowed to use while growing up. They are overused, as well. Thanks btw πŸ™‚

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    tua1992

    Reblogged this on 1992 and commented:
    I don’t have to say much here. The three-word title says more than enough.

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    Mirror MUSES

    Wow! I love that. Definitely Freshly Pressed worthy. Congrats!

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    Angelia Sims

    Look at you! Freshly pressed. I told you, I’d say, I knew you when. πŸ™‚

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      SAM

      you will get a signed copy of my first book for free. You know that right?

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    panoramaofthoughts

    picture made well use of indeed!

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    Bryan

    It’s not a train. It’s a tram

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      SAM

      In the picture, yes. For my story, it was a train.

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    Coach Muller

    Good stuff!

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