Doing it Wrong

Doing it Wrong

September 14, 2012 Writing 28
Copyright Rochelle Wisoff Fields

“You’re doing it wrong. Any witch worth her salt knows eye of newt always goes in before wolf’s bane.”

Calliope put down the book she was holding and turned around. She cut her eyes at the large black spider watching from the web.

“Fine.” She set the book under the web. “You do it then.”

“Gladly,” said the spider, positioning itself on the book. Calliope moved quickly and slammed the book closed then opened it again. She extracted a leg from the page, dropped it in the pot, then brushed the rest of the crushed body into a jar.

“Now that’s how you do it!” A smile lit her face as she swept the web away.

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28 Responses

  1. Carrie says:

    Hilarious! Loved it. So cute and clever.

  2. OMG, I can’t believe you made me sympathetic to the spider, hahaha! Great little story. Always like witchy stories to begin with, but this one was excellent.

  3. boomiebol says:

    Very clever!!!

  4. Eric Storch says:

    Twisty, twisty. Nicely done!

  5. Very clever, both you and Calliope. Everything worked well and the story flowed beautifully.

  6. 40again says:

    A very clever and witty story, well done. Loved it

  7. Why that sneaky little witch! I’m humored.

  8. rich says:

    never thought i’d have sympathy for a spider. thanks!

  9. Paul says:

    Cute and clever? Blech! Who needs cute and clever? Well, ok, it works as cute. And it works as clever. And probably as a bit of a cautioary tale, too, so I guess it works. Period. Nicely done.

  10. Nice one – well done.

  11. Excellent Sam! The smart-arse spider gets his comeuppance! Nobody likes a back seat potioneer!

    Chris

    http://chriswhitewrites.wordpress.com/2012/09/16/the-daughters-song/

  12. Witch scores 1 against the spider’s 0! Well done!!

  13. JKBradley says:

    Good, good. Ha.

  14. dmmacilroy says:

    You know what they say? Too many cooks…. This was a lovely slice of life from the witch’s kitchen. Something that I loved was the saving of the rest of the spider’s body in the jar. A nice touch that you could have overlooked and I’m sure others will, but that added so much to the tale through atmosphere and attention to detail.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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