Dawning of Discovery

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Dawning of Discovery

September 20, 2011 Writing 4

This is another piece to the Weathered story I am working on, and it falls in the beginning, after the bank scene but before everything else. For those joining for the first time, Blair is opening an art gallery and this woman, Regina, is out to destroy not only her dream, but her life. This piece is a conversation between Blair and her attorney, Bill {who also happens to be her lover at this point in time}.

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“Today started like any other day, Bill. And it went south fast. I don’t know what to do. This woman—she is all over everything I do. I have no idea what I have done to her, but apparently she claims she knows me from the past, as far back as college.” Her eyes caught site of her nails, the one torn from the adventure in the elevator earlier that day, and several others had been chewed over the course of the day. She couldn’t remember the last time she had done this. She noted briefly that she needed to contact her manicurist in the worst way.

“All the way back to college? Really? Why do you think that?”

“She left me a message on Facebook, asking if my father knew how I ‘cheated my way through college’. Yes, I made a mistake, but….OH MY GOD! Oh my god. Bill! Let me call you right back. I want to check something.”

His voice ended abruptly as she clicked her phone shut. She ran to her closet, shoving clothes aside as she searched for a box. She pulled it out to the living room, and sat on the couch as she went through it.

“Ah ha!” The slight smile captured on her lips as she pulled her college yearbook from the box. She skimmed through it quickly, until she got to the Senior pictures. She flipped through slowly until she came to the R’s. She was looking for R. Angelina Potts, her college roommate. When she found it, shock came over her face.

“Oh my god! Bill! You will never believe what I have just discovered!” She was a lot louder than she intended to be. “This woman? She really is my old college roommate!!”

“What? Wow. Are you sure?”

“R. Angelina Potts, Regina Adams, yes, I’m quite sure. I never paid attention to what the R stood for in school, but now that I think about it, I believe I do remember her being called Regina in school too. I can’t believe she is doing all of this because I borrowed her idea for art class! I just thought she was pissed because I wouldn’t hire her. Now it’s all making sense, what she said in the interview.”

“How do you ‘borrow’ an idea for art class? And no, I have a  feeling this is more than just revenge for an art project from 20 plus years ago. She has a vendetta. I wish you would let me put a security detail on you. You are far too trusting of those who don’t deserve it.” His voice had a hint of warning in it, but he knew Blair would ignore it. As it was, he had already hired someone privately to keep an eye on her.

“You are entirely too paranoid, Bill, but I love that you are that worried about me. Now that I know who I am doing battle with, the game has changed. Trust me.”

“I do trust you, but the problem is that I’m not convinced you really know exactly what you are up against. I think there is a lot more danger of scandal here than you are aware of. I wish you would let me help you. Please  just think about what I’m saying, okay?” He knew it was pointless because she wouldn’t do it. He tried to convince himself that at least he had tried to warn her and what happens from this point on was her own doing.

“My father…”

“You, sweets, are NOT your father.”

“No, I’m not, but I won’t be underestimated either. What she did in the elevator, Bill, was horrid. That won’t happen again.”

“And exactly how are you going to make sure of that?”

“Life goes on, Bill. Just trust me. I have my ways.”

“I hope for your sake you are right.”

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  I took some creative liberties with the 1st prompt from the Bloggy Moms’ Writer’s Workshop this week. The prompt was: Use this to begin your story:   The day started like any other. End your story with this: And so life goes.

What do you think? Concrit is always welcome.

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4 Responses

  1. Chelle says:

    Ooohhhh, this is good! I love how you captured how a person can be driven to revenge and the little steps they plan along the way. Visualize me rubbing my hands together at the villain you’ve created.

  2. Carrie says:

    So Bill was her lover before Anthony…and now, later in the story, he’s working WITH Regina to ensure Blair fails…

    so, did Blair dump Bill? Is he bitter?

    Small critique: your dialogue when Blair discovers who Regina is is a bit rough. I stumbled over the phrasing. Maybe read it aloud with the emphasis you think she would be making and see if it needs to be tweaked. Probably just needs a word cut here and there, some contractions made.

    More intrigue and the plot thickens. Love it

    • DM says:

      This piece honestly is rubbish in the grand scheme of the story. It started off as conversation between Blair and Anthony, then I realized there is no way that she would not know that Regina was her college roommate this late in the story, so I switched to Bill. It’s a rewrite to a very early chapter, which will need a lot more rewriting, apparently, LOL.

      Thanks for offering such great critique.

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