In Time: Swing Life Away

In Time: Swing Life Away
August 8, 2012 15 Comments Writing Stephanie Ayers

This follows immediately after this: A Moment in Time

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“You loved me once. You could let me go.” Viola pleaded, her steel facade melting as she spoke.

“I no longer have a heart. I have the scars to prove it,” the Time Keeper said, holding his pistol firm.

She hissed, “You think I don’t?  I have to live forever remembering what I did to you.”

“I would’ve moved the earth for you! Now I’m stuck here, less of a man, heartless, between worlds, forever.”

Viola stepped closer and kissed his lips. A single shot was fired and she slumped to the ground.

“It doesn’t have to be like this.”

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This week’s 100 W0rd Song was Swing Life Away by Rise Against (my stepson’s favorite band). This is my interpretation of it.

I welcome constructive criticism. Feel free to share your thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!!

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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  1. 15 Comments

    k~

    Treacherous beginning to what feels like it could be a much larger story. You have my attention!

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    Eric Storch

    Ok, first, the 100 words? Love it! The TimeKeeper and Viola both saying, “It doesn’t have to be like this.” I love even more. (See? I went and read the other parts)

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      SAM

      lol. you are awesome to read the preceding piece. 😉 Thank you, Eric for your words,

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    Carrie

    I’m not sure who said the last line…I assume Cage but…it doesn’t quite fit coming from him, assuming he just shot her.

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      SAM

      its open ended on purpose so i have some wiggle room to write with.

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    Tara R.

    So much going on here and I am hooked. Tight dialog and swirling emotions, doesn’t get much better.

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      SAM

      wow! thanks tara!

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    dberonilla

    You painted a very vivid picture with just 100 words! Wow!
    I am also intrigued and would like to read more. 🙂

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      SAM

      WOW!! Thanks for the compliment!

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    jesterqueen (@jesterqueen)

    There’s a Pink Floyd song “Why don’t you talk to me” (or something like that) with a similar lyric to that last line. I imagine them repeating this scene over and over in a horrible time loop.

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      SAM

      Oh that would be interesting.

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    t

    Damn. That second to-last line punched me.

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      SAM

      Sorry that it “got” you. It wasn’t meant to be sweet and pretty.

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