Adrift

Adrift
January 9, 2013 30 Comments Master Class, Writing Stephanie Ayers

I write this sitting in the kitchen sink. It’s not what you think though. I’m not in a house or an apartment. I’m not in anything anyone would consider habitable. I’m sitting in one of those large metal sinks you’d find in a restaurant, used for cleaning dishes. There are three compartments and I am not alone, though I wish I was. The other two have already given up and succumbed to the heat of the sun. I am left surrounded by water and this nefarious odor from their decaying bodies that hits me every time the wind blows just the right way, which happens too often.

Every direction I look, there is nothing but sea and sky and the occasional dorsal fin. The smell, at least, keeps the sharks away. I see no other signs of life, nor have I in the days I’ve been adrift, not even a small fishing boat or an airplane rumbling through the sky. This is not a surprise considering the way the world went up in smoke. I’m still amazed that my two now-dead companions and I survived at all.

The days themselves have blurred into one and I lost track how many have passed since the holocaust. I can’t dwell on any of this, though, or I will go crazy. I’m already crazed from hunger and my tongue longs for a taste of anything besides seaweed. Even then, it’s been days since I consumed the last of it. As long as I can keep my wits about me, I can hope for rescue.

I refuse to give up.

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This week’s Master Class is from Dodie Smith’s I Capture the Castle with this opening line: “I write this sitting in the kitchen sink.”

I’m also linking this up with #FridayFlash.

As always I welcome and appreciate your feedback. Please share your thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!

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Stephanie Ayers A published author with a knack for twisted tales, Stephanie Ayers is the Executive Creative Director of OWS Ink, LLC, a community for writers and readers alike. She loves a good thriller, fairies, things that go bump in the night, and sappy stories. When she is not writing, she can be found in Creative Cloud designing book covers and promotional graphics for authors.
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    Tara R.

    Oh… gave me chills. Very apocalyptic.

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      SAM

      Funny how we both chose water and rescue to write two very different stories!

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    Marian

    this person really needs a tiger to show up to shake up the day-to-day monotony 🙂

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      SAM

      He needs something that’s for sure!

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        SAM

        i’m assuming this line is based on a current movie playing called Life of Pi?

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    Carrie

    Interesting that it is a sink he ends up adrift in…I would expect a metal sink to well…sink (pardon the pun 😉 ) And once those dudes started to smell? I’d have tossed em to the sharks!

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      SAM

      he was afraid to rock the boat! 😉

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    2old2tap

    That is just a chilling thought. Adrift in a sink. Especially since I’m very familiar with the 3-compartment variety.

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      SAM

      I am too. I had to stretch my imagination just a teensy bit, LOL.

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    Eric Storch

    Yeah, the dead guys? Overboard before they start to smell. I think that’s drive me nuts more than the hunger.

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      SAM

      I wouldnt want to be in this situation by any means!

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    David Wiley

    I love what you did with this short piece. I agree with the others that the first choice would have been to topple them into the water when they started to smell. But then again, maybe the person longs for the company, even if it is of the decaying corpses. I can envision them having conversations beneath the hot sun while adrift.

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      SAM

      Also? It keeps the sharks away.

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    kimnelsonwrites

    In a sink with the stink. Bummer.

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      SAM

      hahahahahahahaha. BEST COMMENT EVER!!!

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    stankmeaner

    Ha, I love your dark side, seriously

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      SAM

      Awww, thanks. It comes out quite often.

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    Amalia Dillin

    Oofda. I suppose at least she might be able to use the bodies for bait or something? Fish for the world serpent with someone’s head?

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      SAM

      I like the way you think! 😉

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    Li @ FlashFiction

    Well, at least the narrator didn’t resort to cannibalism!

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    t

    Really cool – leaves me wishing I knew how it ended (I mean, I can pretty much guess…)

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      SAM

      I left it open ended on purpose. You decide. 😉 This could be a piece of something larger at some point too.

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    Tina

    Sharks are opportunistic eaters, aren’t they? I don’t know that they would shy away from the smell, but it’s been awhile since I watched Shark Week! I think that this is an awesome beginning to a new novel–I hope to read it some day!

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    Katherine Hajer

    I read this just two days after seeing Life of Pi. Perfect timing!

    I liked the absurdist, funny approach to surviving…. whatever it was. I don’t have much hope for the narrator (rescued by whom, and how?), but it was neat hearing them rationalise it to themselves.

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      SAM

      Thanks! Its amazing what we try to convince ourselves of when in dire straits, eh? I haven’t seen Life of Pi yet.

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    ganymeder

    Wonderfully done. Very vivid.

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