100 Word Song: Telling Stories

100 Word Song: Telling Stories

May 15, 2012 Writing 6

He stood at the altar waiting. The smile on his face told the whole world how he felt. The best man stood beside him, a goofy smile to match on his own face. The music signaling her arrival started. The flower girls stepped out, dropping blood red rose petals on either side as they went. The ladies in waiting came down one by one. The moment of truth arrived. The doors opened. Her father stood there, alone. A gasp came from the crowd as he moved down the aisle. One whisper said it all. “She doesn’t love you like that.”


This week’s 100 Word Song was chosen by K. It is Tracy Chapman’s Telling Stories. This is my response.

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6 Responses

  1. Carrie says:

    Oh, now that is a kick in the teeth! Especially since you highlight the goofy (totally in love) smiles.

  2. Lance says:

    punch and perfectly placed

    Like Carrie said the juxaposition of emotions is excellent

  3. Marian says:

    she doesn’t love you like that? girl has ISSUES.

  4. Chelle says:

    Ah, the plight of the heartbroken. I can see evil things happening from the jilted groom.

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